This was another tight, richly detailed chapter. The flirting during the meeting at the convenience store was subtle and charming. I loved the description of Will's nervousness even as he was playing it cool. Excellent description here: "He froze in recognition of that voice, coins gone quiet as he paused in counting the change in the till. He still had a hard time believing his eyes when he looked up." All of that nervous anticipation was met in the moment Angel speaks to him again.
This was another fine turn of phrase: "...Will tried to shrug on his confidence despite the fact that he was feeling rattled."
You painted a vivid scene in the fire investigation, and I really love how pissed Liam is that it's just a copycat fire. The connection between these two is smoldering nicely.
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Date: 2007-05-07 05:28 pm (UTC)This was another fine turn of phrase: "...Will tried to shrug on his confidence despite the fact that he was feeling rattled."
You painted a vivid scene in the fire investigation, and I really love how pissed Liam is that it's just a copycat fire. The connection between these two is smoldering nicely.