thatotherperv

ok, I mean, I'm always open for thoughtful concrit, but I've never *done* anything about it one way or the other, or expressed my opinion on the subject. with I Burn...I'm more invested in this story, I guess. when I finish with this, I plan on going back and smoothing some things out, probably making some changes, and adding some flourishes.

I was just going to ask at the end if anyone had concrit, but the more I thought about it, the more I decided that required too much of your memories. :) so I'll have a link to this post in the header of every chapter, and if you have any concrit, you can come leave it here. this will make revisions easier for me at the end, if I have it all in one place.

fyi, I'm unlikely to make any of the changes you suggest mid-fic. the character interaction and plot is just a little too complicated/delicate for me to do that. I think I'll have to do it retroactively when I'm done.

what I'd want to hear about?
*things that don't ring true, small or large. anything from a phrase that rankled to something that omg that character would never say/do to a whole characterization or plot point is welcome.
*there's a lot of technical stuff in this fic that required research. while I'm not trying to make it believable to a professional fire investigator or a psychologist who specializes in pyromaniacs, if it snags on disbelief with a layperson, that's a weakness in the story. I'd like to hear about that.
*if I fuck something cultural up, you should let me know.
*just any general flaws in logic that might come up.

if it's something specific (like, you know..."Spike burst into tears in chapter 10 in the middle of lighting a fire and sat down and had a nervous breakdown while the house fell down around him...that sucked") then please cite a specific chapter for me, so I can find it easier :)

I mean, I'm not looking for nitpicking here, obviously, but if there's something that makes you go "huh?"...that's bad. some of the larger plot type things, you might want to hold your tongue on until the end, if you think you'll remember. it might answer itself for you. but if you want to comment on it now so you don't forget, that's fine.

be kind. I reserve the right to take your concrit, or not. either way, I'll probably want to discuss it with you. I'm screening comments here, but when I reply, it will be made public. if you're not comfortable having the discussion publicly, you're welcome to email me at thatotherperv@livejournal.com. do me a favor and make the subject "I Burn concrit" or something of the sort.

PLEASE, ONLY CONCRIT HERE. I appreciate if anyone wanted to reassure me that the fic doesn't need concrit, but anything can stand improvement, so let's keep this post concrit business. only comment here if there's something that can stand improvement or clarification. thanks guys :)

this chapter is for danna7000, because her fb on the last chapter made me all giddy with glee. thanks for participating in fandom, honey. you're a thoughtful reader...by which I literally mean, "full of thoughts." *hugs*

Title: I Burn
Author: Mel (thatotherperv)
Pairing: Angel/Spike
Rating: NC-17
Summary: human AU. Spike is a pyromaniac, stalking a fire investigator named Angel. An improbable love story (to say the least).
Warnings: Angst, obviously, from the setup. D/s but not of the usual variety. It’s more…emotional D/s than lifestyle or kink (though there is *some* kink, there’s nothing extreme). Hard to explain, but you’ll see. characterization probably not to everyone's taste, but it all works out in the long run.
infinite thanks to kitty_poker1 for being my second pair of eyes, giving me advice on plot, characterization, and the occasional spelling error. *squishes her*


Note: I accept concrit. but if you have something to discuss with me in need of improvement or clarification, you should bring that concern to me in this post or in email at thatotherperv@livejournal.com. it just makes my life easier to have it in one place.

“You breathe…I burn.”
—Toadies

Previous chapters here

( I Burn, Chapter Five )

many thanks to madame_meretrix for the concrit and conversation. I wouldn't be posting today if it weren't for her *smooches*

Title: I Burn
Author: Mel (thatotherperv)
Pairing: Angel/Spike
Rating: NC-17
Summary: human AU. Spike is a pyromaniac, stalking a fire investigator named Angel. An improbable love story (to say the least).
Warnings: Angst, obviously, from the setup. D/s but not of the usual variety. It’s more…emotional D/s than lifestyle or kink (though there is *some* kink, there’s nothing extreme). Hard to explain, but you’ll see.
infinite thanks to kitty_poker1 for being my second pair of eyes, giving me advice on plot, characterization, and the occasional spelling error. *squishes her*


Note: I accept concrit. but if you have something to discuss with me in need of improvement or clarification, you should bring that concern to me in this post or in email at thatotherperv@livejournal.com. it just makes my life easier to have it in one place.

“You breathe…I burn.”
—Toadies

Previous chapters here

( Chapter 3 )

I’m about to pee my pants I’m so excited to be sharing this fic.

This bunny came to me like a lightning bolt one day while I was driving on back roads in Massachussetts (or...as “back roads” as you get in a state that fucking crowded), listening to the Toadies “I Burn.” Sexiest song about pyromania ever, and the whole plot just fell in my lap. I wasn’t sure for a long time that I could pull this off…it seems like a fic that’s unlikely to end happily, or with the boys together. Took me a while to work out how. I think I don’t need to explain that no matter how you slice it, they aren’t going to be the poster children for functional partnership. But they do alright. Love doesn’t conquer all, but sometimes it helps.

the fic title and all four “part” titles came from the lyrics to that song.

Probably needless to say, but I’m not a pyromaniac, or a psychiatrist…or a firefighter, or a small-town girl. Hopefully I covered everything with research, but there might be inaccuracies. If you want to know more about pyromania, there are concise run-downs of the disease here and (less concise) here. Please be aware that I have to fudge several aspects of pyromania by necessity. Trying to keep it as close to truth as possible, though.


Title: I Burn
Author: Mel (thatotherperv)
Pairing: Angel/Spike
Rating: NC-17
Summary: human AU. Spike is a pyromaniac, stalking a fire investigator named Angel. An improbable love story (to say the least).
Warnings: Angst, obviously, from the setup. D/s but not of the usual variety. It’s more…emotional D/s than lifestyle or kink (though there is *some* kink, there’s nothing extreme). Hard to explain, but you’ll see.
infinite thanks to kitty_poker1 for being my second pair of eyes, giving me advise on plot, characterization, and the occasional spelling error. *squishes her*

Note: I accept concrit. but if you have something to discuss with me in need of improvement or clarification, you should bring that concern to me in this post or in email at thatotherperv@livejournal.com. it just makes my life easier to have it in one place.

“You breathe…I burn.”
—Toadies

( omg so excited )